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Bryan Wiler's avatar

the voice was so good throughout - well done with the "kidspeak" - and you nailed the gradual escalation of horror and dread. what an enjoyable read.

JT Johnson's avatar

Thank you! I really did try and build up the “bad feeling” so your comment made my day

David Perlmutter's avatar

"A pigment of my magination." Nice touch.

JT Johnson's avatar

Thank you!